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I've been gone for a while, but here's something I wrote a bit ago (: As usual, it muchly needs your help. Look at me because I’m about to be ...

On the dark secluded pathways to hidden valleys crafted out of cellophane joy, there is a secret that trickles beneath the mud, that squelches underneath her shoes when she walks ...

Well its cold outside and you know that, yet still you stand there. And if breathing sometimes makes your eyes drip, shaky, to the floor, don’t tell us. Because we ...

Thanks for your help... the only thing is that it completely changes the feel of the poem in my opinion... such as "trembling voice".. where did you get that from? ...

I think I need help with the emotion behind this piece... I feel it, but I'm not sure if others will... any ideas? Always spin the same direction. Because they ...

Hey (: I quite liked this as a poem, although it is awfully sad... then again, there's something about sadness that makes it all the more powerful I think... A ...

I really like the idea behind this. Its unique and leaves your reader on an edge, so they are always questioning... which I think is a good thing... However... What ...

Aw man, I was winning for so long too!!! :cry:

Silly people, of course pain can be sorrowful. Sorrow is pain in a sense, so pain is a form of sorrow as well. Another thing is that there really is ...

Originally a ballad I wrote about a moth ago and completely forgot about... so... rip and tear Lovelies... Three days ago, laughter bought a brand new shawl, and every nerve ...

You know you're a writer when your friends ask, "What's up?" and your answer is simply, "Guess." You know you're a writer when your stomach rumbles and you think, "The ...

I didn't write this. The words just stumble out, so... :) I know exactly what you mean! But truly, I thought this was really good. I especially liked the style ...

Corrections in bold :) There is a man, you no should be know him no doubt , That stands and waggled a tense switch happened here.. should be waggles his ...

Wow that really is beautiful. Very autumnal... It looks a lot like where I live. I actually think I like the smaller version... It seems clearer, and in the larger ...

I'm not sure if the rhythm really works with this... anywho... help? :) And if you can believe then I will show you how to use it, and if you ...